Planning a trip yourself can be very easy. First, you need to know whom you will go with so that you can continue the following steps. Second, decide the place where you will take a trip and what you will do there. Then you can begin to make the schedule about your trip or you will delay your trip. Next, you have to reserve a room, a restaurant, and some places that need previous reservation. Afterwards, prepare some personal effects and medicine to provide against a rainy day. Finally, go to bed earlier than normal with expectance, and enjoy your trip tomorrow.
Next, you have to..., and some places that need previous reservation. 我大概會寫：
回覆刪除..., and some places where you have to make reservations.
Afterwards, prepare some personal effects...
不懂"effects"的意思，我也許會寫"items"。
文中有很多"will"，
有些可以替換成"would like"、"want"...
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
嗨姜姜:))))
回覆刪除我找不到錯字耶哈哈
不過我覺得will有點多..
感覺看文章的時候will出現太多次了@@
姜姜好棒:D
First, you need to know whom you will go with so that you can continue the following steps.
回覆刪除用so that 是不是怪怪的阿?
老話一句
回覆刪除will太多囉!!!
我覺得要先決定地點再看誰要跟你去旅行
回覆刪除這樣感覺比較通順～
（純粹自己的見解）＝ˇ＝
where you will take a trip
回覆刪除改成where you would會不會好一點
what you will do there
改成what you want/would like to do there的話呢?
妳總共有4的will耶!
回覆刪除妳可以改成may或want to 之類的~
以上!
大發啦~
1.Next, you have to reserve a room, a restaurant, and some places that need previous reservation.
回覆刪除→Next, you have to reserve a room, a restaurant, and some places that require previous reservation.
(妳要被Vicky扣5分了.-//-.!)
2.Afterwards, prepare some personal effects and medicine to provide against a rainy day.
→Afterwards, prepare some personal supplements and medicine for a rainy day.
(不太清楚妳想要的是哪個字…不過後面的用這樣就可以達到「以備不時之需」的語意了…)
(以上，淺見…)
will跟trip出現很多次...
回覆刪除姜姜~~
謝謝大家耐心的看完我的文章xd
回覆刪除然後...
冠伶的那句妳要被Vicky扣5分了.....
讓我飽受驚嚇(汗...