My favorite plot of the movie was very sorrowful. I watched the movie with my tears rolling down my face. There was a family, which was composed of a five-year-old boy and a young couple. They used to lead a happy life until one day the heroine found that she was diagnosed with cancer. But she still had a lot of things that she want to do with her child and husband. Unfortunately, she couldn't finish her wish before she die. After the heroine's death, the leading man and his son couldn't take good care of themselves, but they still had to live in a life without their lovely family. Several years later, the heroine came back in the rainy season which was the most joyful time that they had ever had. Although she had brought back to life, she couldn't remember anything with her son and husband. In the end of the story, the leading man and his son tried hard to help their lovely family remember the happy time they once had. However, the heroine still had to return with the sweet memory in the end of the rainy season.
第四行改成wanted
回覆刪除第五行應該是died
had ever had不是這樣用...
最後一句怪怪的
然後結論句咧???
謝謝西瓜同鞋^ ^ 我改完了。
回覆刪除但是，我有個問題：
Had ever had要怎麼用?
最後一句我想寫的是：
當雨季結束時，女主角還是必須回天國。
結論句我本來想用"再...也不為過"的句型
但是好像怪怪的，所以就改成這樣了。
But she still had a lot of things ~ husband.
回覆刪除這句裡面的want應該要改成wanted
Unfortunately, she couldn't finish ~ die.
後面die要和前面時態依樣改成died
嗯 以我的程度好像只能抓錯字XD
姜姜好棒 YA~~~~~~~
The plot of the movie was so touching that made me more treasure the time with my family.
回覆刪除＂so...that...＂的句型應該是：
＂S+beV+so....that+S+V...＂，就是
that後面加個主詞吧。
就這樣★
But she still had a lot of things that she want to do
回覆刪除want應該要改成wanted
she couldn't finish her wish before she die
應該是died
最後一句感覺怪怪的看不懂!!!!!!!
嘿~姜小吟:
回覆刪除我不太懂最後一句話耶??
第四行要改成wanted
下一行請改成died
..........
我盡力了..
To芳珠
回覆刪除最後一句我想寫的是：
但是，當雨季結束時，女主角仍然要回去。
最後，謝謝各位的意見^_^
After the heroine's death, the leading man and his son couldn't take good care of themselves, but they still had to live in a life without their lovely family.
回覆刪除我覺得這一句拆成兩句比較好
就"but"那邊開始分兩句，
用however或nevertheless等轉折詞
(建議~)
大家給的意見我都改正囉^^
回覆刪除然後，
結論句的地方可不可以請大家到revised篇看看
然後意見寫在第一篇。(對吧?
謝謝：D
she couldn't finish her wish before she die.
回覆刪除die-->died
but they still had to live in a life without their lovely family.-->+member
然後最後一句我也案不懂
然後新的那偏結論把treasure改成appreciate比較好
1.There was a family, which was composed of a five-year-old boy and a young couple.
回覆刪除→There was a family, which was composed of a five-year-old boy and the young couple.
2.But she still had a lot of things that she want to do with her child and husband.
→However, she still had a lot of things that she want to do with her child and husband.
3.After the heroine's death...take good care of themselves, but they still had to live in a life without their lovely family.
→After the heroine's death...take good care of themselves, but they still had to live without their lovely family.
4.Although she had brought back to life, she couldn't remember anything with her son and husband.
→Although she had come to life, she couldn't remember anything with her son and husband.
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