Comparing to the two movies I had seen, there are several similarities between them. One is Hanna and the other is The Lovely Bones. Both of them star by the same heroine called Saoirse Ronan. Moreover, Hanna as well as The Lovely Bones is adapted from original novels. Last, the plot of Hanna is exciting and adventurous. Likewise, the circumstances of The Lovely Bones are thrilling and breathtaking. These two movies are so fascinating that they are really worth watching.
Both of them star by the same heroine ...
回覆刪除應該用被動→Both of them are starred by...
少女殺手和蘇西啊，喜歡。
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
Comparing to the two movies I had seen
回覆刪除是不是Compared to啊?
Both of them star by the same heroine called Saoirse Ronan.應該要用被動的are starred
^^
comparing to
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compared with
會不會好一點??
Both of them star by
應該改成
Both of them are starred by
喔
Comparing to the two movies I had seen, there are several similarities between them.
回覆刪除前後主詞要一致
Both of them star by the same heroine called Saoirse Ronan
star的用法可能要查一下喔!!
以上(我真的很想睡= =
1.Comparing to the two movies I had seen, there are several similarities between them.
回覆刪除→Contrasting the two movies I had seen, there were several similarities between them.
2.One is Hanna and the other is The Lovely Bones.
→One was Hanna while the other was The Lovely Bones.
3.Both of them star by the same heroine called Saoirse Ronan.
→Both of them starred the same heroine called Saoirse Ronan.
4.Moreover, Hanna as well as The Lovely Bones is adapted from original novels. Last, the plot of Hanna is exciting and adventurous. Likewise, the circumstances of The Lovely Bones are thrilling and breathtaking.
→Moreover, Hanna as well as The Lovely Bones was adapted from original novels. Last, the plot of Hanna was exciting and adventurous. Likewise, the circumstances of The Lovely Bones were thrilling and breathtaking.
(既然前面用had seen，後面用過去式比較好；既然用了過去式，後面全部統一比較好。)
(以上，淺見…)
Both of them star "by" the same heroine called Saoirse Ronan.
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用法↓
star 動詞 由~主演
電影+star+明星 or 明星+star in+電影
star的用法是後面直接加受詞哦
回覆刪除姜姜的用詞很不錯~
Comparing to the two movies I had seen, there are several similarities between them.
回覆刪除comparing to應該要改成compared with哦
stat的用法是主詞不是人哦~~~
Both of them star by the same heroine
回覆刪除裡的star是不能用被動的喔!
以上~
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