2011年5月18日 星期三

contrasting-2

I am hiring a new English instructor for my school, and I received two resumes from people applying for the job. Contrasting two people, Debra has more education than Lynn. Besides, Debra is more experienced than Lynn in employment. But Lynn is excellence in Teaching Award 2004 while Debra isn’t awarded any prize. Additionally, Lynn is proficient in Spanish, French and Japanese, whereas Debra is only master of French and swimming. After comparing the two people, I decide to hire Lynn, for her outstanding language ability.

9 則留言:

  1. Contrasting two people, Debra has more education than Lynn.
    感覺前面用compared to會比較好

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  2. 時態一樣比較好喔~~

    Contrasting two people, Debra has more education than Lynn.
    前面一句的主詞跟後面的不一樣
    這句要改喔

    excellence是不是應該改成excellent?

    後面錄取的原因可以再詳細一點

    以上(我累我想睡

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  3. 1.Contrasting two people, Debra has more education than Lynn.
    →Contrast two people, Debra has more education than Lynn.
    2.But Lynn is excellence in Teaching Award 2004 while Debra isn't awarded any prize.
    →But Lynn is excellent in Teaching Award 2004 while Debra isn't awarded any prize.
    3.Lynn is proficient in Spanish, French and Japanese, whereas Debra is only master of French and swimming.
    →Lynn is proficient in Spanish, French and Japanese, whereas Debra only masters French and swimming.
    (以上,淺見…)

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  4. Contrasting two people, Debra has more education than Lynn.
    前後的主詞不一致

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  5. Lynn is excellence in Teaching Award 是不是要用excellent呢?
    可以寫詳細一點ˇ哦

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  6. But Lynn is excellence in Teaching...
    在下想寫:"...Lynn is excellent at getting Tea~"

    如有誤,請不吝嗇指教。

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  7. After comparing the two people, I decide to hire Lynn, for her outstanding language ability.
    comparing後面加with哦~~~:D

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  8. Lynn is excellence in Teaching Award 2004
    裡的excellence我想應該是excellent吧!

    以上~
    妳有寫錄取Lynn 原因"for her outstanding language ability."
    不錯喔!

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