Should students be dressed in the bound uniforms? Despite the fact that wearing uniforms is uncomfortable and air tight, I think that it’s necessary for the students to wear uniforms to attend school because by wearing uniforms can a crowded school identify their students conveniently. Furthermore, wearing uniforms can improve the security of campus for the drillmasters or teachers will keep their eyes peeled when they see the students who wear the school’s uniforms. Finally, wearing uniforms will make the students more consolidated and have more centripetal force. When the students behave well off campus, the uniforms will represent the honor of the school. Consequently, I strongly believe that the students should put on uniforms.
1.Despite the fact that wearing uniforms is uncomfortable and air tight, I think that...
回覆刪除→Despite the fact that wearing uniforms is uncomfortable and airtight, I think that...
(airtight 我查到是合在一起，不確定能不能分開。)
2....by wearing uniforms can a crowded school identify their students conveniently.
→...by wearing uniforms can make it easier to identify their students conveniently.
(不確定這麼改對不對，但妳寫的那句怪怪的。)
3.Furthermore, wearing uniforms can improve the security of campus for the drillmasters or teachers will keep their eyes peeled when they see the students who wear the school’s uniforms.
→Furthermore, wearing uniforms can improve the security of campus for the drillmasters or teachers keeping their eyes peeled when they see the students who wear the school’s uniforms.(不太懂你要表達的意思，不過就我的理解是這樣…)
4.Finally, wearing uniforms will make the students more consolidated and have more centripetal force.
→Finally, wearing uniforms will make the students more "consolidated" and have more centripetal force.(這個字總覺得有哪裡不妥耶…感覺它比較屬於「合併」式的統一…後面的向心力，我只知道是有關自然科學的用法，不知道能不能用在這裡。)
﹡結論句還不錯，簡單明瞭。
整篇有點像在看軍事教育的文章呢，
以上，淺見。
because by wearing uniforms can a crowded school identify their students conveniently.
回覆刪除我覺得這句有點奇怪欸 文法是不是有點問題><?
the drillmasters or teachers will keep their eyes peeled
這句我看不懂:(
上面都說完了....
回覆刪除我還能說什麼= =
air tight這是...窒息嗎?
回覆刪除can a crowded school identify對不起我是笨蛋.所以這是什麼意思...?好像怪怪的
然後沒了
because by wearing uniforms can a crowded school identify their students conveniently.
回覆刪除那個can....感覺不通順@@
air tight我查到的是連在一起的哦
回覆刪除by wearing uniforms can a crowded school identify their students conveniently這具有點奇怪耶by wearing unforms, students in a crowded school can be identified by the teachers easily像這樣會不會好一點呢
keep their eyes peeled 是什麼意思??
姜姜~~
... because by wearing uniforms can a crowded school identify their students conveniently.
回覆刪除在下想改：＂... because by wearing uniforms a crowded school can conveniently identify their students.＂
如有誤，請不吝嗇指教。
air tight
回覆刪除是連在一起的吧!
by wearing uniforms "can a crowded school identify their students conveniently."
看句看起來怪怪的~
I strongly believe that the students should "put on" uniforms.
我覺得這裡要用wear
wear→穿著(...衣服)
put on→穿(衣)的動作
because by wearing uniforms can a crowded school identify their students conveniently.
回覆刪除我還真是有說不出來的奇怪...
I strongly believe that the students should put on uniforms.
裡的put on 我會想寫wear
以上~
制服萬歲((啥?